Freedom’s Edge
Comments based on a 27-page Film Treatment submitted to the Australian Film Commission.
As I read the Treatment the story was happening on a screen for me—it had a clean dramatic through-line (or spine) to it, a constantly developing story in every sentence, of events and people, being, doing, happening (and with an implication of the potential for a subtle and layered form of drama) unravelling and revealing more and more in a building, cumulative dramatic process.
My eye constantly moved forward with the film on the screen wanting—and needing—to know what would happen next...
I can see the potential for a really interesting film and with a lot of ideas that could be the residual affects of it... In the meantime, I would recommend this for funding to at least first draft stage.
Moya Wood, Feature Film Assessor, Australian Film Commission